Guest poorgrammar Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 "Most people don’t believe me when I tell them that I suffered from severe depression, anxiety, anger issues and general negative thinking six years ago. Although I had a stable and well paid job back then as a Research Associate, but my personal and workplace relationships were greatly affected by these psychological issues. " Can someone correct my grammar of the above sentences or a better way to write it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 One word to describe... SIAO. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest poorgrammar Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 14 minutes ago, Nightingale said: “Most people don’t believe me when I tell them that I suffered from severe depression, anxiety, anger issues and general negative thinking six years ago. (1) Although I had a stable and well paid job back then as a Research Associate, (2) those psychological issues did (3) greatly affect my personal and workplace relationships." 1. When you have "Although", remove the "but". 2. Changing your second sentence from the passive to the active voice gives your idea the "umph". 3. Inserting the word "did" (greatly affect) adds emphasis to the fact that they actually had a great impact on your relationships. Thanks Nightingale. It means so much to me. Muach Muach Muach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 And you actually believe Nightingale? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prof. Higgins Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 1 hour ago, Guest Guest said: And you actually believe Nightingale? Nightingale is spot on, although I do think the “did” is a tad dramatic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Ingredients Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 6 hours ago, Guest Guest said: And you actually believe Nightingale? Feeling inferior and ashamed now, right? LOL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Bien Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 Good job Nightingale! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kimlo777 Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 I would say change "those" to "these". The use of "those" alienates the issues from the author as if he was talking about issues affecting someone else. Fyi, I have a TOEFL diploma. Suck my tits and I'll lick your balls. Lick my arse and I'll suck your cock. All in sex is fair. The only bad thing about sex is that it doesn't last long enough. Read my blog - www.anasianjourney.blogspot.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Time is NOW Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 I agree with kimlo 777. In addition, I would use well-paid as it is an adjective here describing the job. Cube3 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 11 hours ago, Guest Ingredients said: Feeling inferior and ashamed now, right? LOL You feeling inferior and ashamed now, right? LOL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest poorgrammar Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 3 hours ago, kimlo777 said: I would say change "those" to "these". The use of "those" alienates the issues from the author as if he was talking about issues affecting someone else. Fyi, I have a TOEFL diploma. Thanks Kimlo7777 for the advice. I will change that. Muach Muach Muach 2 hours ago, Time is NOW said: I agree with kimlo 777. In addition, I would use well-paid as it is an adjective here describing the job. Thanks Time is NOW. I will change that one too. Muach Muach Muach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fab Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 Working relationship instead of workplace relationship. 鍾意就好，理佢男定女 never argue with the guests. let them bark all they want. 结缘不结怨 解怨不解缘 After I have said what I wanna say, I don't care what you say. 看穿不说穿 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Native English Teacher Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 Modern style prefers shorter sentences. Previous suggestions fine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kimlo777 Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 I think workplace relationship is fine, but it all depends on what you actually mean. the difference is this: workplace relationship - refers to your relationship with your colleagues or people at your workplace working relationship - refers to how you work with other people in general as you can see, there is a subtle but significant difference in meaning. Suck my tits and I'll lick your balls. Lick my arse and I'll suck your cock. All in sex is fair. The only bad thing about sex is that it doesn't last long enough. Read my blog - www.anasianjourney.blogspot.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fab Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 working ˈwəːkɪŋ/ adjective workplace ˈwəːkpleɪs/ noun 鍾意就好，理佢男定女 never argue with the guests. let them bark all they want. 结缘不结怨 解怨不解缘 After I have said what I wanna say, I don't care what you say. 看穿不说穿 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Bien Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 Nouns can be used adjectives. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prof. Higgins Posted January 17, 2018 Report Share Posted January 17, 2018 Kimlo quite zai, very nuanced! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
justanotherme Posted January 18, 2018 Report Share Posted January 18, 2018 On 1/16/2018 at 10:09 PM, Guest poorgrammar said: "Most people don’t believe me when I tell them that I suffered from severe depression, anxiety, anger issues and general negative thinking six years ago. Although I had a stable and well paid job back then as a Research Associate, but my personal and workplace relationships were greatly affected by these psychological issues. " Can someone correct my grammar of the above sentences or a better way to write it? Most people did not believe me when I told them that I suffered from severe depression well-paid I would cut down on the number of issues listed. Anxiety, anger, negative thinking can be a subset of severe depression Most people did not believe me when I told them that I suffered from severe depression six years ago. Although I had a stable and well-paid job back then as a Research Associate, my personal and workplace relationships were adversely affected by my mental health." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Ah Boy Posted January 18, 2018 Report Share Posted January 18, 2018 Which of the below sentences are grammatically correct? I was fucked big time by a Kor Kor in Sauna last Friday night. Or I got fucked big time by a Kor Kor in Sauna last Friday night. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest poorgrammar Posted January 18, 2018 Report Share Posted January 18, 2018 4 hours ago, justanotherme said: Most people did not believe me when I told them that I suffered from severe depression well-paid I would cut down on the number of issues listed. Anxiety, anger, negative thinking can be a subset of severe depression Most people did not believe me when I told them that I suffered from severe depression six years ago. Although I had a stable and well-paid job back then as a Research Associate, my personal and workplace relationships were adversely affected by my mental health." Thank you for another suggestions. Muach Muach Muach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
justanotherme Posted January 18, 2018 Report Share Posted January 18, 2018 5 hours ago, Guest Ah Boy said: Which of the below sentences are grammatically correct? I was fucked big time by a Kor Kor in Sauna last Friday night. Or I got fucked big time by a Kor Kor in Sauna last Friday night. The difference between the sentences is the emphasis on who carried out the action. "To be" in the first sentence implies the driving force for the fuck was the kor kor while the second sentence places more emphasis on you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fab Posted January 18, 2018 Report Share Posted January 18, 2018 Most people disbelieved me when I said I suffered from severe depression six years ago. Although I was a well-paid Research Associate then, my illness adversely affected my personal and working relationships. 鍾意就好，理佢男定女 never argue with the guests. let them bark all they want. 结缘不结怨 解怨不解缘 After I have said what I wanna say, I don't care what you say. 看穿不说穿 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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